That's a little better but I belive it can be improved, remember the race line it's not always and almost never, the geometrical shape of the track, in this case the race line and the probable impact zone would look like this:
THa thin black line represents the most logical race line, the thick red line represents the probable braking area and the projections to the probable impact zones, as you see, there's still a big chance that sooner or later someone will reach the barrier with catastrophic consecuences.(watch the Monza accident vid)
So I took the liberty to edit a little bit of your track, moving back the corner some 50 meters will definitly improve the safety factor of the track with as little tweaking as I could, preserving the original flavor.
I'm sure racers will appreciate the increased safety on the cost of merely 50 mt of straight line, they can now concentrate on fast racing rather than in a potencial tragedy.
Luiggi